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Xazinon
04-13-2003, 01:52 AM
Okay, well, I got asked to post this, so I thought I better do it. :)

It's a 500 word creative exercise I had to do for university, in which I rewrote a scene in Harry Potter from Draco's perspective. As it was only 500 words, it's not really a scene in the book as such: it's a reflection on a scene. You guys have already read the books a bunch of times so you probably know the bit, but if you don't it's the scene when Draco meets Harry on the Hogwarts Express in the Philosopher's Stone.

I thought about it, but then I didn't change it: this is exactly how I handed it in. Looking at it, I can see problems with it now, but I didn't want to mess with the credibility of it... you can see it how my tutor saw it.

Well, as per request, here it is! Hope you like it. :)
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Draco Malfoy scowled as he looked out the window of his compartment. Potter had been a fool to side himself with the Weasleys. If he had known what was good for him, Draco thought, he would have instantly tried to become friends with me. The Malfoys were a family with a rich, long and powerful tradition, whereas the Weasleys were poor, and the father was sympathetic to Muggles!
Draco sneered. He remembered meeting Potter in Diagon Alley earlier (though he hadn’t known who he was), with that Hagrid: even then, he had been hanging out with unsuitable types. He should have seen the signs that Potter was a weakling, and just wasn’t cut out for life as a wizard.


Nonetheless, he still couldn’t understand why Potter would have turned down the chance to become friends with him. Draco was no fool: Harry Potter was perhaps the most famous wizard in the world, and if he could become friends with Potter, he knew it would only enhance his reputation at Hogwarts.
He looked over at Goyle, still sucking his knuckle from being bitten by the Weasley boy’s rat. As if further to prove their worthlessness, Potter and the Weasley boy had been planning to take on Crabbe and Goyle! If it wasn’t for that rat (which, as it is a Weasley rat, probably has terrible diseases, Malfoy thought) both Potter and Weasley would really have been taught a lesson.

Draco had tried to warn Harry: associating with people like Hagrid and the Weasleys would get you nowhere. Realising he was probably unfamiliar with how the wizard world works, Draco had advised him he would be much better off with a friend such as himself than that other riff-raff he was hanging out with. And what thanks had he gotten for his advice? Potter had refused to shake his hand, and even tried to fight him!
As for that Weasley boy, well, that was the kind of thing you had to expect from a Weasley, Draco thought. They probably act like that because they’re jealous of those of us that they know are better than they are.

Draco shook his head in disgust. He had expected more of Potter than insolence and disrespect: Potter had shown behaviour normally associated with the lower classes. Potter was the one who had defeated Voldemort: he should realise that there are some wizards who it is better to know than others, wizards that can help him rather than hinder him. Judging from the look of him, Draco thought, he probably only defeated Voldemort by accident in the first place.
Draco smiled to himself. If Potter wanted to disrespect his family, Potter would have to accept any consequences that follow. He would show Potter just what it takes to be a wizard, and do all that he could to prove to him that he had made a very bad mistake in making an enemy of Draco Malfoy.

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lithorose
04-13-2003, 10:39 PM
I thought about it, but then I didn't change it: this is exactly how I handed it in. Looking at it, I can see problems with it now, but I didn't want to mess with the credibility of it... you can see it how my tutor saw it.I had this teacher in my arch. studios that would have us pin up all our work and ask us "What do you see?" and refused to comment on them. Made us do all the work. Annoying. But it was good for learning to see...

So what do you see?

Xazinon
04-15-2003, 02:59 AM
LOL, uhoh, called my bluff! :)

I think mainly the problems I see with it are grammatical and structural. There are bits there that could have been expressed in a better fashion language wise and stuff. There's inconsistencies... I have "Draco thought" and then I have "Malfoy thought", and I probably should have stuck with one or the other. Even the phrase "(Draco) thought" is probably overused a little. There seems to be a few more colons in there too then there probably should be. :)

But it's hard, yknow, especially in an assignment like this: I was only allowed 500 words! I think sometimes the shorter pieces are the hardest because you can't always say everything that you want to.

I was reasonably happy with the way I portrayed Draco, I think it was just mainly the structure rather than the content of the piece that was the problem.

How's that, lithorose? :)

LuthienElentari
04-22-2003, 10:42 PM
That was really good .

I mean you got Dracos perspective perfectly. I thought it was
fantastic.

Xazinon
04-23-2003, 01:10 AM
Aww, why thankyou! Nice of you to say so: as with most people, I'm a sucker for a compliment. Thanks! :D

LuthienElentari
05-01-2003, 10:20 PM
your very welcome! you deserve it!:D

Severus Snape
05-07-2003, 02:41 PM
I agree! Very good!

Xazinon
05-09-2003, 10:49 AM
Thanks muchly! Flattery will get you everywhere. :D

owl
06-01-2003, 10:28 AM
The story was fantastic . It was an absolute pleasure to read;). If you want to do any more please do.Oh and make it as funny as you can!!!
Did you have to put it on here, or did they just ask you ?
To whoever told you to put it on here THANKYOU VERY MUCH!!!!
This is how I went when after I read it

:jawdrop:

Fleur
06-01-2003, 03:42 PM
Wow. I like reading fan fics from different characters pov, and I think you accomplished it perfectly. It reallly felt like how draco would feel and nothing seemed out of place.

500 words is unfair! It could have gone on much longer!

Xazinon
06-03-2003, 10:45 AM
Originally posted by owl
The story was fantastic . It was an absolute pleasure to read;). If you want to do any more please do.Oh and make it as funny as you can!!!
Did you have to put it on here, or did they just ask you ?
To whoever told you to put it on here THANKYOU VERY MUCH!!!!
This is how I went when after I read it

:jawdrop:

:o Thanks! :D

I didn't have to put it on, I just got asked to.. I think Elfea and lithorose wanted to see it, so you can thank them. ;)

Hehe, well, I try and put a bit of humour into pretty much anything I write, so if I ever do put anything else up on here, chances are it will have something of amusement somewhere. :)

Thanks to you too, Fleur: wow, everything said about my essay piece is positive so far. That's very flattering, I must say! Thankyou to everyone. :)

500 words is unfair you think? I agreed, initially, but I think it might have helped this piece. Having such a small word limit means you really have to be very precise about what you say... you can't just go on and on about nothing. You can't 'waffle' I think is the technical term for it, hehe! ;) It definitely makes it more challenging: you're right, it could have gone on longer. Perhaps another time, eh? :)